There’s a slippage that happens during the piece, a total conflation of player and character. It’s full of sentences like this: “I enter the Founders Lodge, a seat of purist disease.” But, like, no. You hold a controller. You direct your first-person avatar into a digital representation of an artist’s idea of what the headquarters of a racist prewar secret society in an imaginary city using magic physics to levitate would look like. A seat of purist disease? There is the sense here, to me, that the piece is not written about the game but from within the game, in the vocabulary of a stock Ken Levine character. So it’s news to you that people write from the POV of a game character about a game which exists for the player to immerse themselves in the game world? Really? Do you go to a Star Trek or Star Wars movie and periodically stand up and address the rest of the audience, telling them not to get so wrapped up in it because that starship bridge is just painted plywood and LEDs? Good grief. Maybe you’re not the best person to critique the writing of others.